It causes one to feel lower
The feeling eats at your insides
It tears at your muscles
Sickness is like a slithering snake waiting to strike
Your head spins like a turntable
You are constantly walking through a tar pit
Sickness is not immortal,
it can be beaten
With an equally powerful force
Along with the help of time
Techniques:
- end-stopped line
- metaphor
- simile
- personification
- sibilance
- alliteration
I really like the poem Sydney. It is simplistic, but conveys the message that you were trying to convey. Nice jobs on using all of those techniques too.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very deep and meaningful. I really enjoyed reading it.
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